Mistake #3 - Weak Linking Words

Using “Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly” in every paragraph produces a mechanical feel.


❌ Example

“Firstly, people eat unhealthy food. Secondly, they lack exercise.”

Technically correct but low-quality cohesion.


🎯 Why Examiners Penalise This

Weak or template linking words = memorised structure.
Examiners want natural, logical continuity.


✅ Band-8 Fix Method: “Semantic Linking”

Use meaning-based connections instead:

“One key factor is the growing availability of fast food. Another contributing issue is the decrease in daily physical activity.”

No explicit connectors needed.


✔ Quick Checklist

  • Does the linking word add meaning?
  • Could the sentence flow naturally without it?

Continue to: Mistake #4 - Too Many Linking Words