Mistake #5 - Ideas Jump Around (No Logical Flow)

Paragraphs become confusing when ideas are arranged randomly.

❌ Example

“Fast food is cheap. People are busy. Schools should teach nutrition.”

Unrelated, no progression.

🎯 Why Examiners Penalise This

A Band-8 essay must have clear, logical sequencing.
Random ordering signals no planning.

✅ Band-8 Fix Method: “Cause → Effect → Example”

Organise ideas like this:

1. Cause
2. Effect
3. Example
4. Result/summary

Example:

“Fast food is cheap and widely available, which encourages people to choose it for convenience. As a result, obesity rates have risen sharply.”

Continue to: Mistake #6 - Bad Referencing