عينات مجانية لكتابة IELTS المهمة 1 | مقالات نموذجية النطاق 7-9

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Global Production Projections 2040-2060

6.5
النتيجة الإجمالية
النطاق النحوي والدقة
6.5
المورد المعجمي
6.5
التماسك والانسجام
6.5
الاستجابة للمهمة
6.5

لقد كتبت 12 جملة.

درجة الباند الدقيقة لهذه المقالة هي 6.5.


أكثر 3 جمل حرجة تخفض درجتك بمقدار 0.9 باند.

إصلاح هذه الجمل الثلاث فقط يمكن أن يرفع درجتك من باند 6.5 إلى 7.4.


إصلاح المشاكل الخمس الرئيسية قد يوصلك إلى باند 8+.

#1The given pie charts show some data about projected global production by sector in 2040 and 2060.🎉

#2Overall, services are expected to have highest production in both years.    ~0.10'

النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.2'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.2'

#3Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.    ~0.13'

النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.3'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.2'

#4The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.    ~0.28'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.2'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.3'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'

#5In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.    ~0.17'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.2'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.2'

#6Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.    ~0.25'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.2'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.2'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'

#7Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.    ~0.30'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.3'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.3'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'

#8Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.    ~0.30'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.3'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.3'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'

#9Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.    ~0.30'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.3'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.3'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'

#10Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.    ~0.17'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.2'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.1'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.1'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'

#11Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.    ~0.20'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.2'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.1'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.1'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.4'

#12However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.    ~0.28'

التماسك والانسجام      ~0.3'
النطاق النحوي والدقة      ~0.3'
المورد المعجمي      ~0.2'
الاستجابة للمهمة      ~0.3'
تقديرات الخصم التقريبية لأغراض التعلم — وليست مقاييس آيلتس الرسمية
~0.2
 services are expected to have highest production in both years
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'highest production' makes the phrase ungrammatical; superlative adjectives require 'the'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article usage
 services are expected to have the highest production in both years
~0.3
 Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.
🖉 Incorrect use of 'production' as a countable noun here; 'production' is uncountable and should be replaced with 'sector' or rephrased.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Word form and collocation
 Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest sector.
~0.2
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 Missing serial comma before 'and' reduces clarity; also, 'info-com tech' is informal and inconsistent with other sector names.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and lexical choice
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials, and info-com tech.
~0.2
 In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
🖉 Missing comma before the relative clause 'which will slightly decrease...' causes a run-on sentence; also 'be 40%' is awkward, better to say 'account for 40%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and sentence structure
 In 2040, services are predicted to account for 40%, which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
~0.2
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 Incorrect adverb placement and missing article; 'increase little' is ungrammatical, should be 'increase a little' or 'increase slightly'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Adverb usage
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase a little in 2060.
~0.3
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 Missing comma before 'but' creates a run-on sentence; also 'increase 2%' should be 'increase by 2%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and preposition use
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, but it will increase by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 Subject-verb agreement error: 'Energy ... decrease' should be 'decreases'; also missing preposition 'by' before '2%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement and preposition use
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but decreases by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
 Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 Incorrect verb choice and missing preposition: 'reduce' is transitive and needs an object; better to say 'will reduce by 3%' or 'will decrease by 3%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Verb usage and preposition
 Agriculture is 4% and will reduce by 3% in 2060.
~0.1
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 Missing comma before 'but' causes a run-on sentence.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040, but will slightly increase in 2060.
~0.1
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 The phrase 'change a little' is informal and vague; better to use 'change slightly' or 'undergo slight changes'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Lexical choice
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly.
~0.3
 However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 Incorrect verb agreement: 'data' is plural and should be followed by 'seem' not 'seems'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement
 However, some data seem unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
~0.2
 services are expected to have highest production in both years
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'highest production' makes the phrase unnatural and grammatically incorrect.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 services are expected to have the highest production in both years
~0.2
 Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.
🖉 'production' is uncountable here and does not collocate well with 'second largest'; 'sector' or 'category' would be more appropriate.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest sector.
~0.3
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 The phrase 'info-com tech' is an informal and nonstandard abbreviation; the correct term is 'information and communication technology' or 'ICT'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and information and communication technology.
~0.2
 In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
🖉 The phrase 'services are predicted to be 40%' is awkward; better collocations would be 'account for 40%' or 'make up 40%'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 In 2040, services are predicted to account for 40%, which will slightly decrease to 39% in 2060.
~0.2
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'increase little' is unidiomatic; 'increase slightly' or 'increase a little' is correct.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly in 2060.
~0.3
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 Again, 'info-com tech' is informal; also, 'increase 2%' is awkward without 'by' before the number.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors; Collocation issues
 Information and communication technology is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, but it will increase by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 Missing subject agreement: 'decrease' should be 'will decrease'; also missing 'by' before '2%'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
 Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 'reduce' is not correctly used here; 'reduce' is usually transitive. The correct verb is 'decrease' or 'decline'. Also missing 'by' before '3%'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors; Collocation issues
 Agriculture is 4% and will decrease by 3% in 2060.
~0.1
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'materials' since it is a sector name; also 'slightly increase' is acceptable but could be more precise with 'increase slightly'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will increase slightly in 2060.
~0.1
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 'change a little' is informal and imprecise; better to use 'change slightly' or 'undergo minor changes'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly.
~0.2
 However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 'some data seems unclear' is vague and awkward; 'some of the data are unclear' or 'some data appear unclear' is better. Also, 'do not give information about total production' is slightly imprecise; 'do not provide information on total production' is more formal.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
 However, some of the data appear unclear, and the charts do not provide information on total production or other details.
~0.3
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 The sentence lists sectors without clear grouping or logical sequencing, making the presentation feel like a list rather than a coherent introduction to the data categories.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials, and information and communication technology, which are smaller sectors.
~0.3
 In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
🖉 The sentence lacks a linking word before 'which', causing a slight break in flow and making the relationship between the two clauses less clear.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 In 2040, services are predicted to be 40%, which will slightly decrease to 39% in 2060.
~0.3
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'will increase little' is awkward and unclear, disrupting smooth cohesion and clarity of the trend described.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly in 2060.
~0.3
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 The conjunction 'but' is used incorrectly here, as the increase is consistent with the previous statement rather than contrasting it, causing a cohesion issue.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, and it will increase by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'will' before 'decrease', causing grammatical and cohesion issues that interrupt the logical flow.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
 Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'will reduce 3%' is awkward and unclear; 'reduce' is typically transitive, so the phrasing disrupts clarity and cohesion.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 Agriculture is 4% and will decrease by 3% in 2060.
~0.2
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 The sentence uses 'but' to link two related facts without a clear contrast, weakening cohesion between ideas.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 and will slightly increase in 2060.
~0.2
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 The paragraph ends abruptly without a linking sentence that connects this summary to the previous detailed data, causing weak paragraph closure.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Paragraph closure (PEEL: Link)
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly, reflecting modest shifts across sectors.
~0.3
 However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 This sentence introduces a new idea unrelated to the previous content without a clear transition, disrupting overall progression and cohesion.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Link)
 It should be noted that the charts do not provide information about total production or other details.
~0.3
 The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 The sentence lists all sectors without prioritising or identifying key features, treating minor sectors equally with major ones, which dilutes focus on main trends.
😢Task Response – Over-selection of minor details (PEEL: Point)
 The charts also include data for smaller sectors such as energy, agriculture, materials, and info-com tech.
~0.3
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'will increase little' is vague and does not specify the degree of change, lacking precise data support.
😢Task Response – Insufficient data support and vague reporting (PEEL: Example)
 Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly to 32% in 2060.
~0.3
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 The increase is reported without clarifying whether it is an absolute or relative increase, causing potential ambiguity.
😢Task Response – Inaccurate data reporting (PEEL: Example)
 Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% and will increase to 17% in 2060.
~0.3
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'decrease 2%' is ambiguous; it is unclear if it means a 2 percentage point decrease or a 2% relative decrease, lacking clarity and precision.
😢Task Response – Inaccurate data reporting (PEEL: Example)
 Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease to 5% in 2060.
~0.3
 Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 The statement is unclear whether agriculture will reduce by 3 percentage points or 3 percent, leading to inaccurate interpretation.
😢Task Response – Inaccurate data reporting (PEEL: Example)
 Agriculture is 4% in 2040 and will reduce to 1% in 2060.
~0.3
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'slightly increase' is vague and lacks specific data, which is insufficient for accurate reporting.
😢Task Response – Insufficient data support (PEEL: Example)
 Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will increase slightly to 4% in 2060.
~0.4
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 The overview is too general and does not clearly summarise the main trends or significant differences, lacking meaningful interpretation.
😢Task Response – Incomplete overview and insufficient explanation (PEEL: Explain)
 Generally, services and manufacturing remain relatively stable with only slight changes, while smaller sectors such as info-com tech increase and energy, agriculture, and materials experience minor decreases or increases.
~0.3
 However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 This sentence introduces irrelevant commentary about the data source rather than reporting or interpreting the data, which is off-task.
😢Task Response – Irrelevant content (PEEL: Link)
 

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