Contoh Gratis IELTS Writing Task 1 | Esai Model Band 7–9
Dapatkan contoh gratis IELTS Writing Task 1 dan esai model Band 7–9 yang dirancang untuk siswa ESL. Pelajari struktur esai dengan skor tinggi, kosakata akademik, dan teknik penulisan efektif untuk meningkatkan skor band IELTS Task 1 Anda dan mencapai kesuksesan dalam ujian.
Global Production Projections 2040-2060
6.5
Skor Keseluruhan
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi
6.5
Sumber Leksikal
6.5
Koherensi dan Kohesi
6.5
Respons Tugas
6.5
Anda menulis 12 kalimat.
Skor band yang tepat untuk esai ini adalah 6.5.
Tiga kalimat paling kritis menurunkan skor Anda sebesar 0.9 band.
Memperbaiki 3 kalimat ini saja dapat menaikkan esai Anda dari Band 6.5 → 7.4.
Perbaiki semua 5 masalah utama untuk berpotensi mencapai Band 8+.
#1The given pie charts show some data about projected global production by sector in 2040 and 2060.🎉
#2Overall, services are expected to have highest production in both years. ~0.10'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.2'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.2'
#3Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production. ~0.13'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.3'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.2'
#4The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech. ~0.28'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.2'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.3'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
#5In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%. ~0.17'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.2'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.2'
#6Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060. ~0.25'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.2'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.2'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
#7Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060. ~0.30'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.3'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.3'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
#8Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060. ~0.30'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.3'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.3'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
#9Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060. ~0.30'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.3'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.3'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
#10Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060. ~0.17'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.2'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.1'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.1'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
#11Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little. ~0.20'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.2'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.1'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.1'
Respons Tugas ~0.4'
#12However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details. ~0.28'
Koherensi dan Kohesi ~0.3'
Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~0.3'
Sumber Leksikal ~0.2'
Respons Tugas ~0.3'
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+Jangkauan Tata Bahasa dan Akurasi ~2.5'
~0.2
services are expected to have highest production in both years
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'highest production' makes the phrase ungrammatical; superlative adjectives require 'the'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article usage
services are expected to have the highest production in both years
~0.3
Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.
🖉 Incorrect use of 'production' as a countable noun here; 'production' is uncountable and should be replaced with 'sector' or rephrased.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Word form and collocation
Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest sector.
~0.2
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 Missing serial comma before 'and' reduces clarity; also, 'info-com tech' is informal and inconsistent with other sector names.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and lexical choice
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials, and info-com tech.
~0.2
In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
🖉 Missing comma before the relative clause 'which will slightly decrease...' causes a run-on sentence; also 'be 40%' is awkward, better to say 'account for 40%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and sentence structure
In 2040, services are predicted to account for 40%, which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
~0.2
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 Incorrect adverb placement and missing article; 'increase little' is ungrammatical, should be 'increase a little' or 'increase slightly'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Adverb usage
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase a little in 2060.
~0.3
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 Missing comma before 'but' creates a run-on sentence; also 'increase 2%' should be 'increase by 2%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and preposition use
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, but it will increase by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 Subject-verb agreement error: 'Energy ... decrease' should be 'decreases'; also missing preposition 'by' before '2%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement and preposition use
Energy is 7% in 2040 but decreases by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 Incorrect verb choice and missing preposition: 'reduce' is transitive and needs an object; better to say 'will reduce by 3%' or 'will decrease by 3%'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Verb usage and preposition
Agriculture is 4% and will reduce by 3% in 2060.
~0.1
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 Missing comma before 'but' causes a run-on sentence.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040, but will slightly increase in 2060.
~0.1
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 The phrase 'change a little' is informal and vague; better to use 'change slightly' or 'undergo slight changes'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Lexical choice
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly.
~0.3
However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 Incorrect verb agreement: 'data' is plural and should be followed by 'seem' not 'seems'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement
However, some data seem unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
+Sumber Leksikal ~2.5'
~0.2
services are expected to have highest production in both years
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'highest production' makes the phrase unnatural and grammatically incorrect.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
services are expected to have the highest production in both years
~0.2
Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.
🖉 'production' is uncountable here and does not collocate well with 'second largest'; 'sector' or 'category' would be more appropriate.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest sector.
~0.3
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 The phrase 'info-com tech' is an informal and nonstandard abbreviation; the correct term is 'information and communication technology' or 'ICT'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and information and communication technology.
~0.2
In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
🖉 The phrase 'services are predicted to be 40%' is awkward; better collocations would be 'account for 40%' or 'make up 40%'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
In 2040, services are predicted to account for 40%, which will slightly decrease to 39% in 2060.
~0.2
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'increase little' is unidiomatic; 'increase slightly' or 'increase a little' is correct.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly in 2060.
~0.3
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 Again, 'info-com tech' is informal; also, 'increase 2%' is awkward without 'by' before the number.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors; Collocation issues
Information and communication technology is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, but it will increase by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 Missing subject agreement: 'decrease' should be 'will decrease'; also missing 'by' before '2%'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors
Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 'reduce' is not correctly used here; 'reduce' is usually transitive. The correct verb is 'decrease' or 'decline'. Also missing 'by' before '3%'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors; Collocation issues
Agriculture is 4% and will decrease by 3% in 2060.
~0.1
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'materials' since it is a sector name; also 'slightly increase' is acceptable but could be more precise with 'increase slightly'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will increase slightly in 2060.
~0.1
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 'change a little' is informal and imprecise; better to use 'change slightly' or 'undergo minor changes'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly.
~0.2
However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 'some data seems unclear' is vague and awkward; 'some of the data are unclear' or 'some data appear unclear' is better. Also, 'do not give information about total production' is slightly imprecise; 'do not provide information on total production' is more formal.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing
However, some of the data appear unclear, and the charts do not provide information on total production or other details.
+Koherensi dan Kohesi ~2.5'
~0.3
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 The sentence lists sectors without clear grouping or logical sequencing, making the presentation feel like a list rather than a coherent introduction to the data categories.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials, and information and communication technology, which are smaller sectors.
~0.3
In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.
🖉 The sentence lacks a linking word before 'which', causing a slight break in flow and making the relationship between the two clauses less clear.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
In 2040, services are predicted to be 40%, which will slightly decrease to 39% in 2060.
~0.3
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'will increase little' is awkward and unclear, disrupting smooth cohesion and clarity of the trend described.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly in 2060.
~0.3
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 The conjunction 'but' is used incorrectly here, as the increase is consistent with the previous statement rather than contrasting it, causing a cohesion issue.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, and it will increase by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'will' before 'decrease', causing grammatical and cohesion issues that interrupt the logical flow.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease by 2% in 2060.
~0.3
Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'will reduce 3%' is awkward and unclear; 'reduce' is typically transitive, so the phrasing disrupts clarity and cohesion.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
Agriculture is 4% and will decrease by 3% in 2060.
~0.2
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 The sentence uses 'but' to link two related facts without a clear contrast, weakening cohesion between ideas.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 and will slightly increase in 2060.
~0.2
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 The paragraph ends abruptly without a linking sentence that connects this summary to the previous detailed data, causing weak paragraph closure.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Paragraph closure (PEEL: Link)
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly, reflecting modest shifts across sectors.
~0.3
However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 This sentence introduces a new idea unrelated to the previous content without a clear transition, disrupting overall progression and cohesion.
😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Link)
It should be noted that the charts do not provide information about total production or other details.
+Respons Tugas ~2.5'
~0.3
The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.
🖉 The sentence lists all sectors without prioritising or identifying key features, treating minor sectors equally with major ones, which dilutes focus on main trends.
😢Task Response – Over-selection of minor details (PEEL: Point)
The charts also include data for smaller sectors such as energy, agriculture, materials, and info-com tech.
~0.3
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'will increase little' is vague and does not specify the degree of change, lacking precise data support.
😢Task Response – Insufficient data support and vague reporting (PEEL: Example)
Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly to 32% in 2060.
~0.3
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.
🖉 The increase is reported without clarifying whether it is an absolute or relative increase, causing potential ambiguity.
😢Task Response – Inaccurate data reporting (PEEL: Example)
Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% and will increase to 17% in 2060.
~0.3
Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'decrease 2%' is ambiguous; it is unclear if it means a 2 percentage point decrease or a 2% relative decrease, lacking clarity and precision.
😢Task Response – Inaccurate data reporting (PEEL: Example)
Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease to 5% in 2060.
~0.3
Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.
🖉 The statement is unclear whether agriculture will reduce by 3 percentage points or 3 percent, leading to inaccurate interpretation.
😢Task Response – Inaccurate data reporting (PEEL: Example)
Agriculture is 4% in 2040 and will reduce to 1% in 2060.
~0.3
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.
🖉 The phrase 'slightly increase' is vague and lacks specific data, which is insufficient for accurate reporting.
😢Task Response – Insufficient data support (PEEL: Example)
Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will increase slightly to 4% in 2060.
~0.4
Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.
🖉 The overview is too general and does not clearly summarise the main trends or significant differences, lacking meaningful interpretation.
😢Task Response – Incomplete overview and insufficient explanation (PEEL: Explain)
Generally, services and manufacturing remain relatively stable with only slight changes, while smaller sectors such as info-com tech increase and energy, agriculture, and materials experience minor decreases or increases.
~0.3
However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.
🖉 This sentence introduces irrelevant commentary about the data source rather than reporting or interpreting the data, which is off-task.
😢Task Response – Irrelevant content (PEEL: Link)
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