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Education - Band 5.5
Original: The education is very important for children. They go to school to learn many things and get good job in future.
Rewritten: A solid education is foundational for a child's development, equipping them with essential knowledge and skills crucial for their future career prospects.
Environment - Band 6.5
Original: Pollution is a big problem in my city. The government should do something to stop factories from throwing waste into rivers.
Rewritten: Urban pollution has become a critical issue in my city. It is imperative that the government implements stricter regulations to prevent industrial facilities from discharging hazardous waste into our waterways.
Technology - Band 7.5
Original: Nowadays, many people use smartphones for everything. This has good and bad effects on our society.
Rewritten: The ubiquitous use of smartphones in contemporary society has brought about both considerable advantages and significant drawbacks, fundamentally altering social interactions and daily routines.
๋น๊ต ๋ถ์
์์ ์ (๋ฐด๋ 6.0)
The education is very important for children. They go to school to learn many things and get good job in future.
์์ ํ (๋ฐด๋ 9.0)
A solid education is foundational for a child's development, equipping them with essential knowledgeย and skills crucial for their future career prospects.
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