무료 IELTS 라이팅 태스크 2 샘플 | 밴드 7-9 모범 에세이

ESL 학생들을 위해 설계된 무료 IELTS 라이팅 태스크 2 샘플과 밴드 7-9 모범 에세이를 받아보세요. 고득점 에세이 구조, 학술 어휘, 효과적인 작문 기법을 배워 IELTS 태스크 2 밴드 점수를 향상시키고 시험에서 성공을 거두세요.

Online vs. Traditional Learning

전체 점수

문법의 범위와 정확성

어휘 자원

6.5

일관성과 응집성

과제 응답

6.5

당신은 총 21개의 문장을 작성했습니다.

이 에세이의 정확한 밴드 점수는 6.8입니다.

가장 중요한 3개의 문장이 점수를 0.7 밴드 낮추고 있습니다.

이 3개의 문장만 수정해도 점수가 Band 6.8 → 7.5로 상승할 수 있습니다.

5개의 주요 문제를 모두 해결하면 Band 7.9+을 노릴 수 있습니다.

#1In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast. ~0.17'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.2'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.3'

어휘 자원 ~0.2'

#2Some people think it is the future of education, but others believe traditional classrooms are better. ~0.05'

어휘 자원 ~0.2'

#3I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situation and learning style. ~0.15'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.2'

어휘 자원 ~0.2'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#4People who support online learning say that it is very convenient. ~0.05'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#5Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries. ~0.08'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.2'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

#6Also, it can save time and money because there is no need to travel to school.🎉

#7For example, some people can learn foreign languages online without going to language schools. ~0.05'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.2'

#8Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students. ~0.15'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.3'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#9This way students can learn at their own speed and can repeat lessons if they want. ~0.03'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

#10It also allows students to learn independently without being controlled by teachers. ~0.03'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

#11On the other hand, some people prefer traditional classrooms because it is more effective. ~0.05'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#12In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately. ~0.27'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.3'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.3'

어휘 자원 ~0.3'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#13They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills. ~0.20'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.2'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.2'

어휘 자원 ~0.2'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#14Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home. ~0.27'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.3'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.3'

어휘 자원 ~0.3'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#15Some people say online learning may cause distraction. ~0.17'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.2'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.2'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#16Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students. ~0.17'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.2'

문법의 범위와 정확성 ~0.2'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#17It can help students to finish work on time and avoid procrastination. ~0.03'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

#18I think online learning is useful but I still prefer classroom learning. ~0.08'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.1'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#19Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated. ~0.08'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#20Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends. ~0.08'

어휘 자원 ~0.1'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

#21In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence. ~0.13'

일관성과 응집성 ~0.1'

어휘 자원 ~0.2'

과제 응답 ~0.2'

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+문법의 범위와 정확성 ~2'

~0.3

In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.

🖉 'has becomes' is incorrect verb form; correct present perfect form is 'has become'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Verb form error

In recent years, online learning has become more popular because technology is developing fast.

~0.3

Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.

🖉 Missing article before 'evenings'; should be 'in the evenings'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article usage

Some courses are also available in the evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.

~0.3

In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.

🖉 Missing article before 'classroom' and 'question' should be plural 'questions' or preceded by an article.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article usage and singular/plural agreement

In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask questions immediately.

~0.2

They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.

🖉 'this help' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; should be 'this helps'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement

They also can meet friends and this helps them to develop social skills.

~0.3

Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.

🖉 'more easier' is redundant; 'easier' alone is correct. Also missing article before 'classroom'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Comparative form and article usage

Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home.

~0.2

Some people say online learning may cause distraction.

🖉 Countable noun 'distraction' should be plural or preceded by an article: 'distractions' or 'a distraction'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Countable noun usage

Some people say online learning may cause distractions.

~0.2

Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

🖉 Missing article before 'Classroom'; should be 'The classroom'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article usage

The classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

~0.2

I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situation and learning style.

🖉 Missing plural form for 'students' situation'; should be 'students' situations' or 'a student's situation'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Singular/plural agreement

I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situations and learning styles.

+어휘 자원 ~2.5'

~0.2

In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.

🖉 Incorrect verb form 'has becomes' should be 'has become'. This is a word form error affecting lexical accuracy.

😢Lexical Resource - Word form error

In recent years, online learning has become more popular because technology is developing fast.

~0.2

Some people think it is the future of education, but others believe traditional classrooms are better.

🖉 Repetition of the word 'think' and 'believe' in a simple way limits lexical variation; more precise or varied verbs could be used.

😢Lexical Resource - Repetition of words or lack of lexical variation

Some people consider it the future of education, but others argue that traditional classrooms are superior.

~0.2

it depends on students' situation and learning style.

🖉 The phrase 'students' situation' is imprecise and awkward; 'students' individual circumstances' or 'students' needs' would be more natural collocations.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

it depends on students' individual circumstances and learning style.

~0.1

Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.

🖉 The phrase 'choose any courses from many countries' is awkward; 'choose courses offered by institutions in many countries' is more natural.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

Students can study at home and choose courses offered by institutions in many countries.

~0.1

Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.

🖉 Missing article before 'evenings' ('in the evenings'); this affects natural phrasing and lexical accuracy.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

Some courses are also available in the evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.

~0.1

This way students can learn at their own speed and can repeat lessons if they want.

🖉 The phrase 'at their own speed' is less common collocation than 'at their own pace'.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

This way students can learn at their own pace and can repeat lessons if they want.

~0.1

It also allows students to learn independently without being controlled by teachers.

🖉 The phrase 'being controlled by teachers' sounds awkward and slightly negative; 'guided by teachers' or 'supervised by teachers' would be more appropriate collocations.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

It also allows students to learn independently without direct supervision by teachers.

~0.3

In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.

🖉 Missing article before 'classroom' ('In the classroom'); also, 'ask question' should be plural 'ask questions'.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues and word form errors

In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask questions immediately.

~0.2

They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.

🖉 'this help' is grammatically incorrect; should be 'this helps'. Also, 'meet friends' is simple and could be improved to 'interact with peers' for lexical sophistication.

😢Lexical Resource - Word form error and lack of lexical variation

They can also interact with peers, and this helps them to develop social skills.

~0.3

Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.

🖉 'more easier' is a redundancy error; 'easier' alone is correct. Also, missing article before 'classroom' ('in the classroom').

😢Lexical Resource - Word form error and collocation issues

Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home.

~0.1

Some people say online learning may cause distraction.

🖉 The noun 'distraction' is countable here and should be plural 'distractions' to sound natural.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues

Some people say online learning may cause distractions.

~0.1

Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

🖉 Missing article before 'Classroom' ('The classroom').

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues

The classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

~0.1

It can help students to finish work on time and avoid procrastination.

🖉 The phrase 'help students to finish work' is acceptable but 'help students finish work' is more natural collocation.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues

It can help students finish work on time and avoid procrastination.

~0.1

Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.

🖉 Repetition of 'learning' and 'flexible' without synonyms reduces lexical variety.

😢Lexical Resource - Repetition of words or lack of lexical variation

E-learning offers flexibility, but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.

~0.1

Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends.

🖉 Repetition of 'learning' and 'communication' is somewhat basic; 'face-to-face education' or 'traditional education' and 'interaction' could improve lexical resource.

😢Lexical Resource - Repetition of words or lack of lexical variation

Traditional education provides better interaction with teachers and peers.

~0.2

In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.

🖉 The phrase 'classroom is better' is incomplete; 'the classroom environment' or 'classroom learning' would be more precise. Also, 'understanding' is vague here.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues and imprecise word choice

In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom learning is better for developing students' skills, comprehension, and confidence.

+일관성과 응집성 ~2'

~0.2

In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.

🖉 The topic sentence is somewhat unfocused because it combines two ideas (popularity of online learning and rapid technology development) without clearly signposting the paragraph's controlling idea.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Point)

In recent years, online learning has become more popular due to rapid technological development.

~0.2

Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.

🖉 The sentence lacks a clear cohesive device to link the two ideas smoothly, making the connection between studying at home and choosing courses from many countries feel abrupt.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)

Students can study at home, and moreover, they can choose courses from many countries.

~0.2

For example, some people can learn foreign languages online without going to language schools.

🖉 The example is introduced abruptly without a clear link to the previous sentence, weakening the flow within the paragraph.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Example)

For example, this means some people can learn foreign languages online without going to language schools.

~0.3

In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.

🖉 The sentence contains unclear referencing and awkward phrasing ('In classroom' should be 'In the classroom'), which affects cohesion and clarity.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)

In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly, and students can ask questions immediately.

~0.2

They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.

🖉 The pronoun 'this' is vague and the sentence lacks a cohesive device to clearly link the ideas, causing a slight disruption in flow.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)

They can also meet friends, which helps them to develop social skills.

~0.3

Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.

🖉 The phrase 'more easier' is grammatically incorrect and interrupts cohesion; also, 'in classroom' should be 'in the classroom' for clarity.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)

Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home.

~0.2

Some people say online learning may cause distraction.

🖉 This sentence is isolated without a linking device to connect it to the previous idea, causing a slight abruptness in flow.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)

However, some people say online learning may cause distraction.

~0.2

Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

🖉 The sentence lacks a definite article before 'Classroom,' which affects cohesion and clarity.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Explain)

The classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

~0.1

I think online learning is useful but I still prefer classroom learning.

🖉 The sentence lacks a cohesive device to link the contrasting ideas smoothly, affecting the logical progression.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Point)

I think online learning is useful, but I still prefer classroom learning.

~0.1

In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.

🖉 The sentence lacks the definite article before 'classroom,' which weakens cohesion and clarity.

😢Coherence & Cohesion – Logical progression (PEEL: Link)

In general, both types of learning are important, but the classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.

+과제 응답 ~2.5'

~0.2

I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situation and learning style.

🖉 The position is somewhat vague and does not clearly state a definitive stance on the issue, which weakens the overall task response.

😢Task Response – Unclear position (PEEL: Point)

I believe that while both online and traditional learning have advantages, traditional classrooms offer more comprehensive benefits for most students.

~0.2

People who support online learning say that it is very convenient.

🖉 The idea is mentioned but not properly developed with sufficient explanation or detailed reasoning.

😢Task Response – Underdeveloped idea (PEEL: Explain)

People who support online learning argue that it is very convenient because it allows students to access education anytime and anywhere, fitting their personal schedules.

~0.2

Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.

🖉 The example is general and lacks specificity to effectively support the point about flexibility.

😢Task Response – Weak example (PEEL: Example)

For example, many online platforms offer evening courses that enable working professionals to study without interrupting their jobs.

~0.2

On the other hand, some people prefer traditional classrooms because it is more effective.

🖉 The claim that traditional classrooms are more effective is asserted without sufficient explanation or evidence.

😢Task Response – Thin reasoning (PEEL: Explain)

On the other hand, some people prefer traditional classrooms because face-to-face interaction allows for immediate clarification of doubts, which can enhance understanding.

~0.2

In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.

🖉 The idea is relevant but lacks development and supporting detail to fully explain why this is beneficial.

😢Task Response – Underdeveloped idea (PEEL: Explain)

In classrooms, teachers can explain difficult topics directly, and students can ask questions immediately, which helps to clear misunderstandings quickly.

~0.2

They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.

🖉 The explanation is superficial and does not elaborate on how social skills are developed or why this is important.

😢Task Response – Thin explanation (PEEL: Explain)

They also can meet friends, which helps them develop important social skills such as communication and teamwork.

~0.2

Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.

🖉 The point is asserted without sufficient reasoning or examples to explain why focus is better in classrooms.

😢Task Response – Thin reasoning (PEEL: Explain)

Moreover, it is easier to focus in classrooms than at home because the learning environment is structured and free from common home distractions.

~0.2

Some people say online learning may cause distraction.

🖉 This idea is mentioned but not developed or supported with explanation or examples.

😢Task Response – Underdeveloped idea (PEEL: Explain)

Some people say online learning may cause distraction due to the presence of social media and household interruptions during study time.

~0.2

Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.

🖉 The claim is relevant but lacks explanation or examples to clarify how discipline and routine benefit students.

😢Task Response – Thin explanation (PEEL: Explain)

Classrooms also provide more discipline and routine, which help students develop good study habits and time management skills.

~0.2

I think online learning is useful but I still prefer classroom learning.

🖉 The position is stated but not fully justified with clear reasoning or development.

😢Task Response – Underdeveloped position (PEEL: Point/Explain)

I think online learning is useful for its flexibility, but I prefer classroom learning because it offers better interaction and support.

~0.2

Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.

🖉 The point about motivation is mentioned but not developed or supported with explanation.

😢Task Response – Underdeveloped idea (PEEL: Explain)

Online learning is flexible, but students may find it difficult to stay motivated without direct supervision and peer interaction.

~0.2

Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends.

🖉 The statement is relevant but lacks development or examples to explain why communication is better.

😢Task Response – Underdeveloped idea (PEEL: Explain)

Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends, allowing for immediate feedback and collaborative learning.

~0.2

In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.

🖉 The conclusion is general and does not clearly link back to the task or reinforce the writer's position strongly.

😢Task Response – Weak link to task (PEEL: Link)

In general, while both types of learning have value, classroom education is more effective for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence, making it the preferable choice.

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