Бесплатные образцы IELTS Writing Task 2 | Модельные эссе Band 7–9
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Online vs Traditional Learning Methods
Вы написали 21 предложений.
Точный балл за это эссе — 6.9.
Три наиболее критичных предложения снижают ваш балл на 0.7.
Исправив только эти 3 предложения, вы можете поднять оценку с 6.9 до 7.6.
Исправьте все 5 основных проблем, чтобы потенциально достичь 7.9+.
(Разблокируйте проверку всех эссе, чтобы повышать балл быстрее! 🔥🚀)
In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast. (~0.23)Some people think it is the future of education, but others believe traditional classrooms are better.I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situation and learning style.
People who support online learning say that it is very convenient.Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.Also, it can save time and money because there is no need to travel to school.For example, some people can learn foreign languages online without going to language schools.Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students. (~0.17)This way students can learn at their own speed and can repeat lessons if they want.It also allows students to learn independently without being controlled by teachers.
On the other hand, some people prefer traditional classrooms because it is more effective.In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately. (~0.25)They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills. (~0.2)Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home. (~0.2)Some people say online learning may cause distraction.Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.It can help students to finish work on time and avoid procrastination.
I think online learning is useful but I still prefer classroom learning.Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends.In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.
People who support online learning say that it is very convenient.Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.Also, it can save time and money because there is no need to travel to school.For example, some people can learn foreign languages online without going to language schools.Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students. (~0.17)This way students can learn at their own speed and can repeat lessons if they want.It also allows students to learn independently without being controlled by teachers.
On the other hand, some people prefer traditional classrooms because it is more effective.In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately. (~0.25)They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills. (~0.2)Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home. (~0.2)Some people say online learning may cause distraction.Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.It can help students to finish work on time and avoid procrastination.
I think online learning is useful but I still prefer classroom learning.Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends.In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.
7
Общий балл
Грамматический диапазон и точность
7
Лексический ресурс
6.5
Связность и согласованность
7.5
Ответ на задание
6.5
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+Грамматический диапазон и точность ~2'
~0.3
In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.
🖉 Incorrect verb form 'has becomes' instead of 'has become' violates subject-verb agreement and verb tense accuracy.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Verb form error
In recent years, online learning has become more popular because technology is developing fast.
~0.3
Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.
🖉 Missing article before 'evenings'; 'in evenings' should be 'in the evenings' for correct article usage.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article error
Some courses are also available in the evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.
~0.3
In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'classroom'; also 'ask question' should be plural 'ask questions' for count noun agreement.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article and singular/plural noun error
In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask questions immediately.
~0.2
They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.
🖉 'this help' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; should be 'this helps' because 'this' is singular.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement
They also can meet friends and this helps them to develop social skills.
~0.3
Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.
🖉 Double comparative error: 'more easier' is incorrect; should be 'easier'. Also missing article 'the' before 'classroom'.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Comparative form and article error
Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home.
~0.2
Some people say online learning may cause distraction.
🖉 Countable noun 'distraction' should be plural or preceded by an article; 'cause distractions' or 'cause a distraction' is correct.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Countable noun usage
Some people say online learning may cause distractions.
~0.2
Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
🖉 Missing article 'The' before 'Classroom' to specify the noun.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article error
The classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
~0.2
In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.
🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'classroom' for specificity.
😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article error
In general, both types of learning are important, but the classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.
+Лексический ресурс ~2.5'
~0.3
In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.
🖉 'has becomes' is a grammatical error; correct verb form is 'has become'. This affects word form accuracy and natural phrasing.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form error
In recent years, online learning has become more popular because technology is developing fast.
~0.2
Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.
🖉 The phrase 'choose any courses' is unnatural collocation; 'choose courses' or 'choose from courses' is better. Also, 'any courses from many countries' is vague and awkward.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues and unnatural phrasing
Students can study at home and choose courses offered by institutions in many countries.
~0.1
Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.
🖉 Missing article before 'evenings' leads to unnatural phrasing; should be 'in the evenings'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation and article usage
Some courses are also available in the evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.
~0.1
This way students can learn at their own speed and can repeat lessons if they want.
🖉 Repetition of 'can' in close proximity is slightly awkward and repetitive; stylistically better to avoid repetition.
😢Lexical Resource - Repetition of words
This way, students can learn at their own speed and repeat lessons if they want.
~0.1
It also allows students to learn independently without being controlled by teachers.
🖉 The phrase 'without being controlled by teachers' is somewhat awkward and imprecise; 'without constant supervision' or 'without direct control' would be more natural.
😢Lexical Resource - Awkward or imprecise word choice
It also allows students to learn independently without constant supervision from teachers.
~0.3
In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.
🖉 Missing article before 'classroom' ('In the classroom'). Also, 'ask question' should be plural 'ask questions'.
😢Lexical Resource - Article usage and word form error
In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask questions immediately.
~0.2
They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.
🖉 Subject-verb agreement error: 'this help' should be 'this helps'.
😢Lexical Resource - Word form and grammar affecting lexical accuracy
They also can meet friends and this helps them to develop social skills.
~0.3
Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.
🖉 'more easier' is a redundancy error; 'easier' alone is correct. Missing article before 'classroom' ('in the classroom').
😢Lexical Resource - Word form and article usage errors
Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home.
~0.1
Some people say online learning may cause distraction.
🖉 Countable noun 'distraction' should be plural or preceded by an article: 'cause distractions' or 'cause a distraction'.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation and word form error
Some people say online learning may cause distractions.
~0.1
Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
🖉 Missing article before 'Classroom' ('The classroom').
😢Lexical Resource - Article usage
The classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
~0.1
It can help students to finish work on time and avoid procrastination.
🖉 The phrase 'help students to finish work' is slightly less natural; 'help students finish work' is preferred collocation.
😢Lexical Resource - Collocation
It can help students finish work on time and avoid procrastination.
~0.2
Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.
🖉 Repetition of 'learning' and 'classroom learning' throughout the essay shows limited lexical variation.
😢Lexical Resource - Repetition of words/lack of lexical variation
Online education is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.
~0.2
Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends.
🖉 Repetition of 'learning' and 'classroom learning' again; 'face-to-face education' or 'traditional education' could be used for variation.
😢Lexical Resource - Repetition of words/lack of lexical variation
Traditional classroom settings provide better communication with teachers and peers.
~0.2
In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.
🖉 Missing article before 'classroom' ('the classroom'). Also, 'understanding' is vague; 'comprehension' or 'knowledge' might be more precise.
😢Lexical Resource - Article usage and imprecise word choice
In general, both types of learning are important, but the classroom is better for developing students' skills, knowledge, and confidence.
+Связность и согласованность ~1.5'
~0.2
In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.
🖉 The phrase 'has becomes' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow of the introduction, making the sentence awkward and less clear.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Logical flow issues, awkward sequence of ideas
In recent years, online learning has become more popular because technology is developing fast.
~0.2
I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situation and learning style.
🖉 The phrase 'students' situation' is vague and lacks clarity; it should be 'students' situations' or 'a student's situation' for clearer referencing.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Unclear referencing or vague pronouns
I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situations and learning styles.
~0.2
Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.
🖉 The transition between 'study at home' and 'choose any courses' is abrupt; missing a linking word to show addition or consequence.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Missing or ineffective cohesion devices
Students can study at home, and moreover, they can choose courses from many countries.
~0.2
Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.
🖉 The phrase 'in evenings' is missing an article and the pronoun 'it' is vague (does 'it' refer to courses or the schedule?).
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Unclear referencing or vague pronouns
Some courses are also available in the evenings, so this is flexible for busy students.
~0.1
In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.
🖉 Missing article before 'classroom' and 'ask question' should be plural 'ask questions'; these errors affect clarity and smooth reading.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Logical flow issues, awkward sequence of ideas
In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly, and students can ask questions immediately.
~0.1
They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.
🖉 Subject-verb agreement error: 'this help' should be 'this helps'; affects clarity and smooth connection between ideas.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Logical flow issues, awkward sequence of ideas
They can also meet friends, and this helps them to develop social skills.
~0.1
Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.
🖉 Incorrect comparative form 'more easier' (redundant), and missing article before 'classroom' affect clarity and grammatical cohesion.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Logical flow issues, awkward sequence of ideas
Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home.
~0.1
Some people say online learning may cause distraction.
🖉 The sentence is abrupt and lacks a linking phrase to connect it smoothly to the previous idea.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Missing or ineffective cohesion devices
However, some people say online learning may cause distraction.
~0.1
Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
🖉 Missing article before 'Classroom' reduces clarity and disrupts cohesion.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Logical flow issues, awkward sequence of ideas
The classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
~0.1
Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.
🖉 Missing comma before 'but' affects the smoothness of the sentence transition.
😢Coherence & Cohesion - Missing or ineffective cohesion devices
Online learning is flexible, but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.
+Ответ на задание ~2.5'
~0.1
In recent years, online learning has becomes more popular because technology is developing fast.
🖉 The phrase 'has becomes' is grammatically incorrect and affects clarity of the argument.
😢Task Response - clarity and precision of ideas
In recent years, online learning has become more popular because technology is developing fast.
~0.2
I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on students' situation and learning style.
🖉 The phrase 'students' situation' is vague and not fully developed; the idea of how learning style affects choice is not elaborated.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
I think both ways of learning have advantages and disadvantages, and the most suitable method depends on each student's individual situation and preferred learning style.
~0.2
Students can study at home and they can choose any courses from many countries.
🖉 The idea that students can choose courses from many countries is stated but not developed or supported with examples or explanation.
😢Task Response - underdeveloped argument
Students can study at home and choose courses offered by institutions worldwide, giving them access to diverse educational content.
~0.1
Some courses are also available in evenings, so it is flexible for busy students.
🖉 The point about evening courses is mentioned but not expanded to explain why this flexibility is beneficial.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
Some courses are also available in the evenings, which is flexible for busy students who may have daytime commitments such as work or family.
~0.1
This way students can learn at their own speed and can repeat lessons if they want.
🖉 The benefit of self-paced learning is mentioned but lacks further explanation or example.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
This way, students can learn at their own speed and repeat lessons as needed, which helps reinforce understanding.
~0.1
It also allows students to learn independently without being controlled by teachers.
🖉 The phrase 'without being controlled by teachers' has a negative connotation and is not balanced or explained, weakening the argument.
😢Task Response - unclear or inconsistent position
It also allows students to develop independent learning skills by managing their own study pace.
~0.2
In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.
🖉 The idea is valid but lacks depth and examples to fully develop why this is more effective.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask questions immediately, which facilitates better understanding.
~0.2
They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.
🖉 The social skills development point is mentioned but not elaborated or supported with examples.
😢Task Response - underdeveloped argument
They can also meet friends in person, which helps them develop important social skills such as communication and teamwork.
~0.1
Moreover, it is more easier to focus in classroom than at home.
🖉 The idea of better focus in classrooms is stated but not explained or supported with reasons.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
Moreover, it is easier to focus in the classroom than at home because of fewer distractions.
~0.2
Some people say online learning may cause distraction.
🖉 This counterpoint is briefly mentioned without development or examples, weakening the argument.
😢Task Response - underdeveloped argument
Some people say online learning may cause distractions due to the home environment and access to unrelated websites.
~0.1
Classroom also provides more discipline and routine for students.
🖉 The benefit of discipline and routine is introduced but not developed or illustrated.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
The classroom environment also provides more discipline and routine, helping students maintain a consistent study schedule.
~0.1
It can help students to finish work on time and avoid procrastination.
🖉 This idea is connected but not expanded with examples or explanation.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
This structure can help students finish work on time and avoid procrastination by creating external accountability.
~0.1
Online learning is flexible but sometimes it is difficult to stay motivated.
🖉 The issue of motivation is mentioned but not elaborated or supported with examples.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
Online learning is flexible, but students may find it difficult to stay motivated without direct supervision.
~0.1
Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends.
🖉 This claim is valid but not expanded to explain how this improves learning outcomes.
😢Task Response - partial development of ideas
Classroom learning provides better communication with teachers and friends, which enhances understanding and support.
~0.2
In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence.
🖉 The conclusion states a clear position but does not fully justify why classroom learning is better overall.
😢Task Response - unclear or inconsistent position
In general, both types of learning are important, but classroom learning is better for developing students' skills, understanding, and confidence due to direct interaction and structured environment.
~0.2
Some people prefer traditional classrooms because it is more effective.
🖉 The phrase 'it is more effective' is vague and not supported with clear criteria or examples, weakening the argument.
😢Task Response - underdeveloped argument
Some people prefer traditional classrooms because they believe this method leads to more effective learning through direct teacher support and peer interaction.
~0.1
In classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask question immediately.
🖉 The phrase 'ask question' is singular but should be plural 'ask questions' for accuracy and clarity.
😢Task Response - clarity and precision
In the classroom, teachers can explain difficult topics directly and students can ask questions immediately.
~0.1
They also can meet friends and this help them to develop social skills.
🖉 The phrase 'this help' is grammatically incorrect; should be 'this helps'.
😢Task Response - clarity and precision
They also can meet friends and this helps them to develop social skills.
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