Mẫu Miễn Phí IELTS Writing Task 1 | Bài Luận Mẫu Band 7–9

Nhận mẫu miễn phí IELTS Writing Task 1 và bài luận mẫu Band 7–9 được thiết kế cho học sinh ESL. Học cấu trúc bài luận điểm cao, từ vựng học thuật và kỹ thuật viết hiệu quả để cải thiện điểm band IELTS Task 1 của bạn và đạt thành công trong kỳ thi.

Global Production Projections 2040-2060

6.5

Điểm tổng thể

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác

6.5

Tài nguyên từ vựng

6.5

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết

6.5

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ

6.5

Bạn đã viết 12 câu.

Điểm band chính xác của bài luận này là 6.5.

3 câu quan trọng nhất đang làm giảm điểm của bạn 0.9 band.

Chỉ cần sửa 3 câu này, điểm bài luận có thể tăng từ Band 6.5 → 7.4.

Sửa toàn bộ 5 lỗi lớn có thể giúp bạn đạt đến Band 8+.

#1The given pie charts show some data about projected global production by sector in 2040 and 2060.🎉

#2Overall, services are expected to have highest production in both years. ~0.10'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.2'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.2'

#3Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production. ~0.13'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.3'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.2'

#4The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech. ~0.28'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.2'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.3'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

#5In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%. ~0.17'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.2'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.2'

#6Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060. ~0.25'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.2'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.2'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

#7Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060. ~0.30'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.3'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.3'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

#8Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060. ~0.30'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.3'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.3'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

#9Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060. ~0.30'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.3'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.3'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

#10Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060. ~0.17'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.2'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.1'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.1'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

#11Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little. ~0.20'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.2'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.1'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.1'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.4'

#12However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details. ~0.28'

Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~0.3'

Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~0.3'

Tài nguyên từ vựng ~0.2'

Phản hồi nhiệm vụ ~0.3'

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+Phạm vi ngữ pháp và độ chính xác ~2.5'

~0.2

services are expected to have highest production in both years

🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'highest production' makes the phrase ungrammatical; superlative adjectives require 'the'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Article usage

services are expected to have the highest production in both years

~0.3

Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.

🖉 Incorrect use of 'production' as a countable noun here; 'production' is uncountable and should be replaced with 'sector' or rephrased.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Word form and collocation

Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest sector.

~0.2

The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.

🖉 Missing serial comma before 'and' reduces clarity; also, 'info-com tech' is informal and inconsistent with other sector names.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and lexical choice

The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials, and info-com tech.

~0.2

In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.

🖉 Missing comma before the relative clause 'which will slightly decrease...' causes a run-on sentence; also 'be 40%' is awkward, better to say 'account for 40%'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and sentence structure

In 2040, services are predicted to account for 40%, which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.

~0.2

Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.

🖉 Incorrect adverb placement and missing article; 'increase little' is ungrammatical, should be 'increase a little' or 'increase slightly'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Adverb usage

Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase a little in 2060.

~0.3

Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.

🖉 Missing comma before 'but' creates a run-on sentence; also 'increase 2%' should be 'increase by 2%'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation and preposition use

Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, but it will increase by 2% in 2060.

~0.3

Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.

🖉 Subject-verb agreement error: 'Energy ... decrease' should be 'decreases'; also missing preposition 'by' before '2%'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement and preposition use

Energy is 7% in 2040 but decreases by 2% in 2060.

~0.3

Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.

🖉 Incorrect verb choice and missing preposition: 'reduce' is transitive and needs an object; better to say 'will reduce by 3%' or 'will decrease by 3%'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Verb usage and preposition

Agriculture is 4% and will reduce by 3% in 2060.

~0.1

Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.

🖉 Missing comma before 'but' causes a run-on sentence.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Punctuation

Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040, but will slightly increase in 2060.

~0.1

Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.

🖉 The phrase 'change a little' is informal and vague; better to use 'change slightly' or 'undergo slight changes'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Lexical choice

Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly.

~0.3

However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.

🖉 Incorrect verb agreement: 'data' is plural and should be followed by 'seem' not 'seems'.

😢Grammatical Range & Accuracy - Subject-verb agreement

However, some data seem unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.

+Tài nguyên từ vựng ~2.5'

~0.2

services are expected to have highest production in both years

🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'highest production' makes the phrase unnatural and grammatically incorrect.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

services are expected to have the highest production in both years

~0.2

Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest production.

🖉 'production' is uncountable here and does not collocate well with 'second largest'; 'sector' or 'category' would be more appropriate.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

Manufacturing is also important and it is the second largest sector.

~0.3

The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.

🖉 The phrase 'info-com tech' is an informal and nonstandard abbreviation; the correct term is 'information and communication technology' or 'ICT'.

😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors

The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and information and communication technology.

~0.2

In 2040, services are predicted to be 40% which will slightly decrease in 2060 to 39%.

🖉 The phrase 'services are predicted to be 40%' is awkward; better collocations would be 'account for 40%' or 'make up 40%'.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

In 2040, services are predicted to account for 40%, which will slightly decrease to 39% in 2060.

~0.2

Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase little in 2060.

🖉 The phrase 'increase little' is unidiomatic; 'increase slightly' or 'increase a little' is correct.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

Manufacturing is 31% in 2040 and will increase slightly in 2060.

~0.3

Info-com tech is the third highest in 2040 with 15% but it will increase 2% in 2060.

🖉 Again, 'info-com tech' is informal; also, 'increase 2%' is awkward without 'by' before the number.

😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors; Collocation issues

Information and communication technology is the third highest in 2040 with 15%, but it will increase by 2% in 2060.

~0.3

Energy is 7% in 2040 but decrease 2% in 2060.

🖉 Missing subject agreement: 'decrease' should be 'will decrease'; also missing 'by' before '2%'.

😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors

Energy is 7% in 2040 but will decrease by 2% in 2060.

~0.3

Agriculture is 4% and will reduce 3% in 2060.

🖉 'reduce' is not correctly used here; 'reduce' is usually transitive. The correct verb is 'decrease' or 'decline'. Also missing 'by' before '3%'.

😢Lexical Resource - Word form or spelling errors; Collocation issues

Agriculture is 4% and will decrease by 3% in 2060.

~0.1

Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will slightly increase in 2060.

🖉 Missing article 'the' before 'materials' since it is a sector name; also 'slightly increase' is acceptable but could be more precise with 'increase slightly'.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

Materials is the smallest sector with 3% in 2040 but will increase slightly in 2060.

~0.1

Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change a little.

🖉 'change a little' is informal and imprecise; better to use 'change slightly' or 'undergo minor changes'.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

Generally, services and manufacturing remain stable, while the others will change slightly.

~0.2

However, some data seems unclear and the charts do not give information about total production or other details.

🖉 'some data seems unclear' is vague and awkward; 'some of the data are unclear' or 'some data appear unclear' is better. Also, 'do not give information about total production' is slightly imprecise; 'do not provide information on total production' is more formal.

😢Lexical Resource - Collocation issues or unnatural phrasing

However, some of the data appear unclear, and the charts do not provide information on total production or other details.

+Tính mạch lạc và liên kết ~2.5'

~0.3

The charts also include data for energy, agriculture, materials and info-com tech.

🖉 The sentence lists sectors without clear grouping or logical sequencing, making the presentation feel like a list rather than a coherent introduction to the data categories.